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Keyboard on my foot
by Agnes Glinski - Friday, March 19, 2010, 10:16 AM
 

I was extremely confused by the amount of "4's" this essay earned because I didn't think it deserved such a high score; therefore, I was wondering what others thought and if I'm way off base with word choice.

I had a hard time deciding whether to give this essay a 2 or 3, so you can imagine my surprise when 4's were granted.

I feel that the last sentence, "She put a cast on my foot I had to lay down for the rest of the night and that was not fun" reflects the student's inability to use word choice effectively. This was an opportunity to really show off a writer's command of the trait, and I feel that it was missed by the evening's events being described at "not fun."

I 'd love to hear others' thoughts.

Agnes

 
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Re: Keyboard on my foot
by Thiagarajan Narayanasamy - Saturday, October 31, 2015, 11:14 AM
 

I agree with your statement. There seems to be a confusion between word choice and voice. I can hear the voice very clearly but it does not make the composition more interesting as it does not usually use the correct choice of word.