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No Longer a Child
by Joe Krupp - Thursday, February 23, 2006, 3:05 AM
 
I gave this piece a 2 for Ideas & Content.  While getting the basics of the syndrome, the writer needed to include more live examples and expand on his/her ideas. In the paragraph where s/he discussed the past, and in the next where s/he discussed the present in knowing right from wrong and being part of society, actual examples and changes from or relationships to the past would have made the writing a little deeper and strengthened the ideas.  The piece has potential, but without examples it reads as more or less an outline of a change, and not the change itself.