I'd been scoring right along with everyone else until I got to this piece. I am the only person who gave it a five--most gave it a two! That's a pretty big difference and I'm wondering why others graded it so much lower. I thought the overall writing was hard to follow, but the idea seemed strong--it definitely kept my attention, and he stayed focused and on track. I guess maybe I am trying to separate the traits out too much. Maybe since the writing was hard to follow, that means the ideas could never be a five. And I might be not separating out voice enough. In hindsight, I'd go with a four. That's still far different from a two! I'd love to better understand the rationale for lower scoring.... Not only am I not on the same page, I'm in a different book....