Picture of Crystal Conklin
To close to death
by Crystal Conklin - Saturday, February 11, 2006, 9:34 PM
 
I gave this a five but realize now I should've went lower, between a three and a four.  I think I let the beginning graphic language which made me feel like I was there, especially about the flesh hanging, influence my view of the whole piece when really some more description of feelings could've been expressed throughout.  I also really liked the phrasing about feeling like a needle was going into his stomach and that being exactly how it was.  I guess two great sentences aren't enough for a 5, though.