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The night sky
by Thiagarajan Narayanasamy - Saturday, October 24, 2015, 10:31 AM
 

I felt this was excellently organized. From the beginning to the end when he went inside his house, there is a strong development of ideas on why he felt the night sky was amazing. His choice of paragraphs for each idea he developed helps him to show his emphasis of each idea. I particularly liked the idea of comparing the moon to a cat’s eye. His lead highlights the beauty of the moon when he said ..”that night it was beautiful”. That would make the readers stand up and read the rest of the composition.